• sin_free_for_00_days
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    1 year ago

    It’s hard to put three thoughts into one headline. 1) Girl was kidnapped and murdered in 1975 2) The local pastor attended the funeral 3) THE PASTOR DID IT!!

    I’ll try:

    Pastor arrested for 1975 kidnapping and murder of young girl

    That left out that he attended the funeral

    Pastor who attended 1975 funeral of kidnapped and murdered young girl arrested for the crime.

    Too long, and just as awkward.

    I don’t know, should be a 2 sentence headline (which I don’t think clickbait likes), or just go with the simpler

    Pastor arrested for 1975 kidnapping and murder

    Seems like that would get the drift and the other facts could be filled in quickly in the first paragraph of the story.